In my first attempt at this poem, I said
His eyes rose like a green sun,
But I don’t know what I was trying to convey.
Of course the sun isn’t green, and can’t be.
I guess I only meant that his eyes,
A lurid colour of green,
Seemed to burn just above the horizon.
I just wanted to indicate that his eyes were glowing,
Or that they appeared to glow.
And they rose to meet mine,
Just as the sun does,
And that I can’t bear to look into them
Any more than I can stand to stare into the sun.
I think that is what I was getting at.
I meant that his eyes made an impression,
And I will never forget them.
Even after they’ve descended in the western mist,
I will still feel a bit overheated and overexposed
From spending too much time in their glare.